Maybe it's not that bad - I did not have any trouble doing a purchase and download. Most of the changes from the original draft were will done, interesting and filled gaps or answered questions that your critics, er, faithful fans, had noted in the draft.
The only nit I found was regarding Theo's piloting status. In Ch 23, she notes that her 3/c was firm and that she'd need "time in grade, and a couple more trips as PIC" to up her 2/c from "trainee" to "provisional". However, in Ch 25 - subjectively only hours later, and her next PIC trip - her status in the system is "T. Waitley, Provisional Two, out of Anlingdin."
Possible snerking
2010-01-10 14:09 (UTC)The only nit I found was regarding Theo's piloting status. In Ch 23, she notes that her 3/c was firm and that she'd need "time in grade, and a couple more trips as PIC" to up her 2/c from "trainee" to "provisional". However, in Ch 25 - subjectively only hours later, and her next PIC trip - her status in the system is "T. Waitley, Provisional Two, out of Anlingdin."
I really enjoyed her meeting with Clonak.
Brom