Um, no, that part's certain. A blow by blow who struck John multi-viewpoint summation right THERE is not in the works; if a reread tells us otherwise -- or an editor down the road -- we might do something. For us, the writers, doing this now in this draft would slow the pacing for us, as we're writing. It may be that the transition itself needs an extra sentence, another visual cue, a different audible intro, but that, too will depend on a long slow reread where we get to do the balance between senses and balance between intro-tense. For the moment, this is the draft we have.
In general, these kinds of things are discussed in Theo's own community -- http://community.livejournal.com/theo_waitley/
Re: Chapter Fifteen
In general, these kinds of things are discussed in Theo's own community -- http://community.livejournal.com/theo_waitley/